prepastudent Posted June 9, 2015 Share Posted June 9, 2015 Edited, thanks for the advice! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cordelia*8 Posted June 11, 2015 Share Posted June 11, 2015 Aside, not asides. Waaaay too many I's. Lots of instances of using the same word numerous times within just a few sentences. Don't call yourself boneheaded. I get that you're going for expressing a sense of awe, but you have the answers to some of the principles of the mechanics of life--not life itself. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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